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Really. You think you can scare me? You.
Peatiktist, Virgolia, Greater felter, and Restoration of Eastern Kaiserreich
Mmkay my Bois.
I need some help with some story writing it's due tomorrow. So...
Quick plot:
Kocha, a quintessential honours student in a Japanese school in Hokkaido, finds this mysterious app that he finds one day and investigates it to find that the app has the ability to travel through time. Yada yada yada...
Basically, he finds a fellow student, named Akito, who has the same app and they decide to work together to prevent 'the future' where their hometown is found to be in shambles and have to prevent that future. Kocha is known to be introverted and focuses more on studying. This becomes his internal conflict in which he tries to get along with Akito. They discover that the headmaster eventually became this evil and corrupt person who rose from a measely headmaster to a dictator of the country. Kocha and Akito stop him in the climax but he notices the future doesn't change. It's revealed to the end that Akito is actually the cause of the future and used the time travel app to kill the people who looked down on her for revenge. This is where the protagonist suffers his defeat in the resolution.
Note, it needs to be a sci-fi story.
A few questions I have:
-Is there a lack of Sci-Fi elements?
-Is the Internal and External conflicts interesting?
-Could a follow-up story be set after this one?
-What scenes would be an interesting scene that I could write upon?
I send this message because I want to hand in a perfect story so I would be exempted from the final exams.
Please send me some great feedback. Anyways, thanks for reading.
Kampf Empire, Peatiktist, Shavara, Greater felter, and 3 othersThe Angel of Charity, Restoration of Eastern Kaiserreich, and Malayikat alfaragh
c'mon Kampf don't be like that,he is just a fledgeling who recently moved in
Kampf Empire, Peatiktist, and Greater felter
I'd say that there should be some brief hints and actions throughout the story that foreshadow the twist.
Kampf Empire, Gorbastan, and Greater felter
Why is the hero defeated in the end?
Kampf Empire, Peatiktist, Gorbastan, Greater felter, and 1 otherRestoration of Eastern Kaiserreich
Don't belittle Kampf for doing his job.
Actually, do belittle him. Scaring new fledglings is my job.
Kampf is supposed to scare all the non-new fledglings.
Kampf Empire, Virgolia, Greater felter, The Angel of Charity, and 1 otherRestoration of Eastern Kaiserreich
Peat, you just lost islands to OU. You ain’t scary.
True. But, I think I should revel in a little tradition. So....
-CRACK-
* With a single movement, both wings are broken, the bones snapped upwards, and left crooked, feathers flying and blood seeping out wounds caused by splinters puncturing the skin *
Peatiktist, Greater felter, and Restoration of Eastern Kaiserreich
My teacher wanted us to think about this story as a background story or flashback for a character in a made-up video game in which we'd write about why he has a certain goal inside the video game.
So in this case, he's burdened that he caused the destruction of his town and aims to stop Akito in the video game portion which we cannot write about.
Kampf Empire, Peatiktist, Greater felter, The Angel of Charity, and 1 otherRestoration of Eastern Kaiserreich
To make it realistic probably.
I have not lost islands to OU.
I haven't responded to his post yet.
Kampf Empire, Greater felter, The Angel of Charity, and Restoration of Eastern Kaiserreich
I see. In that case be sure to write in crucial mistakes the hero makes so it makes sense for him to lose narratively.
Peatiktist, Gorbastan, Greater felter, and Restoration of Eastern Kaiserreich
Really? Huh. My mistake.
FOOL
HE WIELDS THE BANHAMMER!
oh wait that's paki sorry
HE WIELDS THE SOCKHAMMER!*
Zukchiva, Kampf Empire, Peatiktist, and Greater felter
I haven't had time to respond yet.
I'll probably draft up a response after work.
Kampf Empire and Greater felter
**snaps your neck, shoves a caber up you and then precedes to shove your head up your *ss, wraps your legs with your intestines then burns your liver and eats your heart an spleen*
Peatiktist, Greater felter, The Angel of Charity, and Restoration of Eastern Kaiserreich
Void spear
Kampf Empire, Virgolia, Greater felter, and Restoration of Eastern Kaiserreich
* Just watches as you do all of that to Restoration of Eastern Kaiserreich *
Peatiktist and Greater felter
I think we finally found someone who can be almost as gruesome as Kampf.
Kampf Empire, Greater felter, Restoration of Eastern Kaiserreich, and Malayikat alfaragh
*explodes*
Greater felter, Restoration of Eastern Kaiserreich, and Malayikat alfaragh
Yeet.
Restoration of Eastern Kaiserreich and Malayikat alfaragh
Weak. *Uses the
Kampf Empire, Greater felter, and Malayikat alfaragh
oh ok then,I'll go back to my favorite corner
Very graphic scene, indeed, but shouldn't you two RP as nations?
Lorigia, Kampf Empire, Peatiktist, Greater felter, and 1 otherRestoration of Eastern Kaiserreich
Basically dont poke a sleeping Dragon >.>
Lorigia, Peatiktist, and Greater felter
*Paper cuts your eye*
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